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Jay Myser's avatar

I loved the audio. And the words. Made the hair on my neck stand up. In a good way.

Sam Oldman's avatar

Thanks Jay! You have strong writing too, nice to meet you here!

Jay Myser's avatar

That's very kind of you to say.

Kassi Wilson's avatar

This is powerful! "you rested in painless safety" chilling line!

Sam Oldman's avatar

This was one of the first ones and still one of my personal favorites really. I enjoy the wordplay and the worldplay with contrast.

I have been following your poetry book club. So proud of you, I really love the idea.

https://kassiwilson.substack.com/p/welcome-to-the-club

Ripple's avatar

A cage that lets you see no more...

Awesome!

Melissa Sly's avatar

What KJ said. 💖

KJ Harlow's avatar

Ugh digging this so much

I'm just there listening, just waiting for the melody to break, then...

"By the time

you noticed,

you had not lived

in years."

I love how you chose this bit for the melody, pairing it with a realization. That's when you break out of the spell.

👏🏽

Geraldine A. V. Hughes's avatar

Stellar, I feel your groove 💋